metacognition: ma poesie

In writing and rewriting poems, what I normally find myself fixing are things that sound...awkward.
In the throes of writing, in a flurry of enthusiastic thought, we writers often find ourselves feeling as though we have constructed the perfect composition. NOT SO. Although it may be well-crafted, although we thought our thought processes were absolutely immaculate while our fingers slapped the keys, the end result is normally far more flawed, obviously, than what we had predicted. This frequently occurs with me. I've learned something that may help those of you looking for a way to make your mistakes ever more apparent: Befriend your ex's (if you have one) best friend, "accidentally" mention your poem to them, and comply once they ask to read it. Believe me, once you've heard their responses, the faults will becoming ever more piercingly clear. And you will, you WILL correct them.
Otherwise, what I saw about my writing was that the general flow was good; I was surprised it wasn't overladen with words, much like my messages to certain ex's bff's. The vocabulary is rich at times, and in my head, it all fits quite well. But, when I go back and reread it, I find there are things missing. I feel that if no one were to decide to conduct a class on the poem and try to crawl inside my mind, the emphasis on love or what I was really trying to reach and appreciate would not be embedded deeply enough into their cerebellums. I needed more imagery; I needed more emphasis; I needed it too be quite apparent as to what I was being drawn affectionately towards (in the poem) and that that was what made the tea metaphor work, and significant. I learned that when writing and constructing a poem, ad thinking you are infallible, there are a need of steps you need too take to really make the work ideal:
Get someone of very important standing in yor life to read it.
Get of your high horse.
Stop being afraid of tarnishing your (im)perfection, and
Get writing.